Monday, November 23, 2009

Just another Story. Part -3



CONTINUED FROM:  
Mind out: Just another Story. Part-1
Mind out: Just another Story. Part-2 
                             

Anu was disturbed . She had some family troubles. According to her,her parents were perfectly imperfect for each other. They quarelled and fought with each other so much, that made Anu temperamentally unsuited to family life.The way her father treated her and behaved with her, she couldn't bear it and thought it would be impossible for her in her future to marry and live with some man;when she couldn't tolerate her father's attitude how will she accept someone under the same roof whom she hardly knows. She was avoiding relations and people involved in relations. These reactions in her sub-conscious mind somehow affected her social life.
Everyone started seeming different to her with time.

One of her big problems was turning to be Rishi. She started feeling a difference in him. She felt somehow Rishi was actually wanting to be more than just best friends to her. His touches were different. Those consolating soothing embraces were changing. Rishi has changed - this thought was pinning her constantly. The last day Rishi hold her, she sensed as if Rishi was feeling her, it was not the same friendly hugs; it was different, and Anu didn't like it. But she couldn't tell Rishi anything about this as she thought this might hurt him, in case she was wrong. She was not sure because she had great trust on Rishi, and if it was really like what she was guessing and had felt it would hurt her severely.

As days passed Rishi was more and more in love with Anu. He tried to support her in every possible way. But yes, as he was now in love, things were much different to him, unlike Anu. When Anu and he were close or when she needed his consolations, she was no more his best friend but his inamorata(for him). He hold her the way, he would never let her go away. Anu tried to tear herself away, but in vain;Rishi's strong hands and a burning heart couldn't let her go.

But Anu, inspite of being a modern girl still had some very conservative ideologies. The things she didn't like, none could actually make her like those. The incident affected her. She was creating distance between herself and Rishi, though she herself tried to move the incident out of her mind. She thought, from the next time she'll be conscious and won't let her be that close to Rishi that may cause her later-awkward thoughts and feelings. She also blamed herself somehow for her ill-feelings towards her best friend. Rishi was quiet able to understand how Anu was trying hard to avoid interactions with him, but he could hardly make out what it was. The last day they met ,she didn't even bid a good bye to him, nor looked at his face. This hurt him severely.he kept on wondering what was disturbing her.

Anu believed in platonic relations. She coludn't protest when Rishi was in her love , but she didn't like his 'that way' approach. Anu doesn't look on intimacy as a guilt, but according to her 'that'sort of closeness without one's will was never to be welcome.

 
Anu was once again breaking down as she was moving away from Rishi. In middle of the night she cried aloud 'Rohit where are you?Why you came to me? I ask you only this cause I can't blame you for leaving me,I know I was somehow wrong....Rohit...Rohit.....' .She tried to gather her lost strength from Rohit's name. He was not in her life anymore, but for Anu he was just ubiquitous as always .




Then:
Mind out: Just another Story. Part -4
Mind out: Just another Story. Part-5

25 comments:

Rajlakshmi said...

Aww when will she be happy again.. Your story is really touching.. I just want to know what happens in the end.. I hope theres another part. Well penned.

chocolate lover said...

this one was really sad...loved it...waiting for the next one :)

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

Hey why are u putting the whole link lik that....

i guess u know how to link parts...

will read soon.. :)

Escapist said...

Tats heart throbbing....

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

Well, What should i say..this story is turning out to be more complicated and sad from the initial point. I donno but somehow both rishi and anu have to understand that they cannot help if the other person whom they love is no more interested/in reach. They must try to move on or else accept what is coming their way..

Anyways story is going well and i just hope all the broken peices fall into the right place

Good script :)

adreamygal said...

Its so sad of Anu , its really tough to act everythng as ok when actually its not and a best friend falling in love is actually very difficult to deal with ..you have portrayed it so well...waiting for the next part :)

abc said...

some1 truely said , one who loves can never be happy,.
Its ver touchy.
very nice composition...kip it up.:)

malvi said...

d story going soo complex.
hope everythings becomes fine for anu n rishi.
wil b waiting fr the sequel...tk cre.

Anoop said...

heyyyy...tats sad...
but if Rishi loves her wats wrong in tat? Jus cuz rohit is not in her life anymore doesnt mean tat Anu gotta be with Rishi...but at least she can think of it..
from wat i read abt rishi, he s a nice guy... i dono...m jus guessing..mayb he s havin diff thots in his mind...

this was nice..as if its a true story.. :D
waitin for next part... ;)

Vittaldas Prabhu said...

This story is getting very interesting. I also see a definite improvement in the narration from 1-2-3. This one is the best so far. You have very beautifully brought out the conflict within Anu. Please get the next one out very soon. I would not want to wait long.

To sum up in one word, "Marvelous".

Cheers,
Vittal

Atulya said...

Well as far as described, Anu is running away from life, running away from getting into relationships... Rishi seems to be a nice guy, but even Anu can't help it much as she has no feelings for him...

Well written.. tc

Rohit Dassani said...

Nice... :P ... No words actually!!

AJai said...

I feel sorry for the girl Anu. I get the conflict she's in. Poor thing.
Nice... you write much much better when you don't try and use too much hi-fi vocab. keep it simple. :)

Urvashi said...

Read all the parts of this one...good going.....

so wat next abt Anu now..???

nice blog :)

Raj - Only name sake !! said...

Very interesting !! Hope you have the next part!!!

divsi said...

twists turns n twists...the story is meanderin very well thru a roller coaster of emotions n relationships..:)

nice one rimz!

Ashish said...

read all the three chapters now...and I'm getting where it's heading towards... but shouldn't kill the suspense :P

BTW I'm that crazy guy who has written on your shoutbox :P

aritra the daydreamer said...

was going through your blog..Some posts are really awesome....
anyway it would be a pleasure if u drop in my blog too..comments and followers are most welcome...

sp.ajay said...

i can praise you till the character limit ends, or in case the limit doesn't end till the readers patience ends; but coming to the point when are you writing the next part?

prashslash said...

The portrayal of a girl in a difficult situation and her platonic needs are understandable. You have a great narrating skill and hope you write a great end to the story. Well done !

oRange* said...

well written!
my first time here ..
like ur space!

Yellow Tulip said...

ahhh...its always so confusing...whether to let go of a person who we love but know its not possible to be together. upon tat it becomes more complicated when we know there is one more person who loves us too...may be even more!!...

beautifully expressed dear...hope to see anu happy again:)

Yellow Tulip said...

ahhh...its always so confusing...whether to let go of a person who we love but know its not possible to be together. upon tat it becomes more complicated when we know there is one more person who loves us too...may be even more!!...

beautifully expressed dear...hope to see anu happy again:)

IdleMind said...

I just hopped along ... read all the three parts. The turbulence in Anu is wonderfully sketched. Guess you didn't want to elaborate on Rohit (or even Rishi).

Imperfections are not something one wishes to live with. But the dilemma with Anu is understandable. Such conflicts make the creative journey worth the pleasure. Will read more, if you will!

Anonymous said...

Hey : )
Why do men and women (society generally) still pre-judge people who have tats. girls especially?
I am a 26 year old F, have got 9 tattoos, most of which cannot be noticed on my every day travels. 5 - 6 during the summer are pretty much constantly on display. I don't strive for attention and i also have a loving boyfriend WITH NO TATTOOS .I get the impression that a lot of people believe that tattooed people are blind, as we get stared at, even if we return a glance many people keep on staring. When will society change?

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