Early teenage solitude seems a bliss now.
Works to be done, responsibilities to be carried out.
Going gaga for various things at various times.
Just Dreaming to be alone now.
Who will let me ,to be so?
Often I feel lost in these
Dastardly earthy hues.
So much ears, so much eyes
Open just for me?
Just to praise or criticise me.!?
Or just they pretend..!!!
I hear and see so much of them.
Never felt so crowded ever before...
Zonked of hearing the jabberings.
Euphorian dreams exhorting the cravenly mind.
Yet...
I need some space, some solitude
Some bliss.
Its not:
"The tyrant claims freedom to kill freedom".
I have plenty of it.
Yet the 'yet' remains.
I am confused,
I am lost
Nowhere....
18 comments:
hey Rimz, i liked this! :)
esp. the last 3 lines.. good one!
oh my... too heavy to digest...but nice words...:D
Thats a beautifully worded write..
Yet will always remain no matter what we do.. Thats hw life is..
Lovely poem.
Nice one..
Sweet n Simple..
Last para left the readers feel connected..
:-)
Just Dreaming to be alone now.
Who will let me ,to be so?...
beautiful....
hi di,
that was really sweet..
liked it a alot
especialy the last one..
nice one dear:)...
wow i liked this.. where do you come up with these stuff?
Never felt so crowded ever before...
lovely....wery well expressed..the confusionn, the emotions, very nice!
anything but random that... u've obviously spent a lot of time on it. but why do u feel that you are being intruded upon?
hi rimz, adulthood is a part of life and these emotions are part of it ..
enjoy them with a smile at ur face and with courage at heart..
@Leo:
thanku for liking it.:)
@Sid:
haha...thanku.:)
@Rajlakshmi:
yep u r right. thanku./:)
@Atulya:
yep i kno ,its typical 'our age syndrome'...:P
@RSV:
thanku:_)
@chocolover:
thanku sweetie..:)
@yellowtulip:
thanku dear...:)
@trisytarfivestar:
these r js my mind's thought..:)
@Divsi:
thankoo so much..:)
@AJai:
I often feel intrude cause often ppl forces me to tell things that i prefer to kip upto myslf only..:(
@pramoda:
yeah i agree with you..its right..these feelings ..we cnt avoid dem..:(
"Yet the yet reamins"Loved it.The last three lines are awesome!
Ah! The life of a commoner. No longer we are out of school we are to face a totally strange world. Prying eyes. Suddenly we feel we have set foot in a different space, one that's not too friendly. We have freedom and "yet" we crave for it, and as you said "we are dazed and confused." Beautiful words.
Well written, some parts seemed more complex than the others but good going!
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